You did a great job with the delivery of your elevator pitch. You smile most of the time, your speech is clear, and your tone engaging. The biggest problem I see is the length: your speech is supposed to be about ninety seconds in length, and yours is just over thirty. While you state the problem and a possible solution, it is hard to add enough depth to either in such a short time. Next time try to go a little longer, you do not seem to struggle in front of a camera, and I am sure you would have no problems keeping your audience engaged to present your ideas in more detail.
I enjoyed watching your elevator pitch and thought you did a great job delivering it on many different aspects. I agree with you that this idea needs to become a reality because parking at the University of Florida is clearly an evident issue for both students and faculty. I think for the first elevator pitch you did a great job and I am sure moving forward you will only get better from here on out. Overall, good job and an even better idea.
Remi, I enjoyed listening to your elevator pitch. I thought it was very well rehearsed. It's easy to see when someone hasn't put a lot of time into a presentation such as these elevator pitches. Yours seemed to flow very nicely and include a lot of information regarding the issue you are choosing to combat. If I was to give one piece of advice, I would maybe show a little more enthusiasm. A positive attitude is infectious especially when you're trying to sell someone on your vision. Other than that, your on the right track
Remi,
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job with the delivery of your elevator pitch. You smile most of the time, your speech is clear, and your tone engaging. The biggest problem I see is the length: your speech is supposed to be about ninety seconds in length, and yours is just over thirty. While you state the problem and a possible solution, it is hard to add enough depth to either in such a short time. Next time try to go a little longer, you do not seem to struggle in front of a camera, and I am sure you would have no problems keeping your audience engaged to present your ideas in more detail.
Hey Remi,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed watching your elevator pitch and thought you did a great job delivering it on many different aspects. I agree with you that this idea needs to become a reality because parking at the University of Florida is clearly an evident issue for both students and faculty. I think for the first elevator pitch you did a great job and I am sure moving forward you will only get better from here on out. Overall, good job and an even better idea.
Remi,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed listening to your elevator pitch. I thought it was very well rehearsed. It's easy to see when someone hasn't put a lot of time into a presentation such as these elevator pitches. Yours seemed to flow very nicely and include a lot of information regarding the issue you are choosing to combat. If I was to give one piece of advice, I would maybe show a little more enthusiasm. A positive attitude is infectious especially when you're trying to sell someone on your vision. Other than that, your on the right track