This time in my elevator pitch, I tried to be more relatable and upbeat about my product/service. I want people to be as excited and passionate about expanding UF's parking as I am! This is how I changed mine from last time and reflected on peoples comments!
Hi Remi! Great job. You definitely made your pitch upbeat and relatable! Your elevator pitch flowed well and you can tell that you knew exactly what you wanted to say! You can tell that you are way more comfortable with the assignment now, and I noticed the same for myself.
ReplyDeleteHey Remi!
ReplyDeleteI thought you did a great job of making your elevator pitch relatable and exciting. I was genuinely hooked on what the topic and excited to hear what you would say next. It seems as if you have done a good job of taking your feedback from the other assignments to make this one the best as possible.
Remi,
ReplyDeleteI think this is the best rendition of your elevator pitch that I have seen since we have started doing these earlier this semester. The delivery of the information was very polished and seemed to have a nice flow to it. I appreciate how you have taken the advice and suggestions from others to not only fine tune the tweaks in your pitch but also to improve the overall quality of the pitch as well. I think as you continue to work on this pitch it will continue to become more and more polished. Nice post.